revise practice test 2 or 3

for this blog i choose to revise test 2 as i was reading my essay i already found a problem in the first paragraph. The first paragraph did not introduce to topic enough let alone not even mentioning the main idea of the passage. But the topic sentence could use more work. i also found errors in all the paragraphs. both of the body paragraphs needed a lot more development  and in my opinion was not structured well enough. overall the essay was missing a lot of strong points from the passage i think the strongest error in this essay in the introduction paragraph if the intro paragraph introduced the main topic of the passage the examples in the body paragraphs would be more developed and structured better. I learned that from this essay i need to pay close attention to the introduction and go over the first paragraph to make sure i did what the directions of the essay asked for the first paragraph. the intro sets the tone for the whole essay if you point out the strongest detail from the passage in your essay writing the rest of it shouldn't be all that difficult. overall the entire essay could use more work and the introduction can be better written and the body paragraphs could be  way more developed.

personal directions for the catw

On the day of the test the first thing i must do find the title of the passage i am reading find the author of the passage then i read it a couple of times to give myself chances to find details in the story. highlight any major details so i wont forget and  i could go back and check without reading the passage again. then if i have any problems picking up details in the passage or find it hard to relate to the passage then i free write or brainstorm about the passage. when im ready to write the essay i know that it has to be four solid paragraphs. introduction two body paragraphs and an conclusion I know that the intro paragraph must introduce the topic of the passage(main idea) , the title and the author and  you must pick a specific detail in the passage and write weather you disagree or agree with the statement Then the 2 body paragraphs must support your reason why u disagree or agree with a personal experience or what you read or seen on television or what you learned in school. Both paragraphs should have four or five sentences with good development and has to relate to the story. Finally a conclusion paragraph is the last paragraph of your essay should overall summarize what you have wrote.


Now the weaknesses that i have i need to look out for ...for example i know that i need to fix the run-on sentences problem and grammar. and the fact that i lack knowledge on how to write a conclusion paragraph. I know brain storming and free writing will help me write a well developed 2 body paragraphs but the other problems i need to fix like the grammar issue a paper dictionary will help fix that problem and not knowing how to write a conclusion paragraph a little more practice on essay writing and scheduling appointments to meet my professor will help with that issue. But my hardest issue is the run-on sentences ive had this problem with writing for a long time, surprisingly i like to write so trying harder to fix this problem will not be an issue but with more practice and patience and writing more periods in my essay i will fix this run-on sentences issue and  all my weaknesses and pass the final exam. 

catw practice test 3

   Test have shown that music has an effect on the mind and the body. Elizabeth Scott wrote an article called "How and why is music a good tool for health?" The article talks about how test and experiments have been taken to see if music can heal, its called music therapy. It also says that music is being used to help cancer patients, kids with attention problems, pain management, depression, and to ease muscle tension. Another detail is that the beat of a song can stimulate the brainwaves to synchronize with the beat. I agree with that statement that music has an effect on your mind and body. When i listen to music it relaxes me, it clears my mind and helps me think.
   Music is good for the mind because the beat of the song or the lyrics could be the motivation for some people. Myself for an example uses music for motivation all the time. A song with a strong beat is usually used when I'm working out. I specificly choose a song called "do it" by a rap artist named T.I The beat is very loud and fast and has an amped feeling to it and in the chourus he keeps saying whats you waiting for do it you gotta keep doing it. Hearing that tells my brain and my body to not stop keep going and motivation is what people need to get things done. Music is also good for people going through hard times or even depression.
   When people are depressed a lot of things happen to go wrong in their lives. For me when im deperessed I always turn to music for my medication, depression is a  tough attitude to escape from a lot of people try to help but music always does the trick. The song for me is a song with a low toned beat to help me think and just relax and enjoy the small things in life. One of my favorite songs to help me relax is called "clocks" by coldplay. It has a piano type of beat and the lyrics of the song really helps me to think about everything around me.
   In conclusion of this essay we see that music is being used to help people health issues, attention problems, and depression problems. People look up to music artist and thingk highly of them. Probably the fact of having a favorite artist is probablythe key to music helping people.